Great job… The text is worth reading too. May I suggest this translation (I'm not sure to recall the style.) : "I wanted a precious and straight dress, like a dream which vanishes soon and can't be kept, just like the red gold harvested at the crack of dawn in a flower which fades in a day. Under the sun of Greece, Persian or Cashmere, the research of a rare treasure, the most expensive season in the world, in a setting made of purple petals. Fragile, indeed, but divine over the course of a ball, such a velvety frangrance on bare shoulders."